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24 New Ground

Draft 2019.11.16.01 — Josah looked at Eva Marie with a critical eye. He couldn’t find any visible wounds but knew that her pasty color betrayed her secret. She stepped back and pulled up the left sleeve of her surcoat. “I don’t want to hide anything from you,” she said. Someone wrapped her arm using soft, […]

23 Execution Day

Draft 2019.11.10.01 — The boys watched as the Molly Red prepared to leave Southport. Yeva and Munro stood on the quarter-deck, waving their farewell. The sun announced the start of the morning, brisk with scattered clouds. Gulls squawked above, fighting for any scrap of food they could find on the pier. Yeva and the Captain […]

22 Paying the Price

Draft 2019.11.10.01 — Josah shivered as the cold night’s breeze blew towards Rylie Glen. The deck of the Molly Red was lit by the moon, as he sat on the bottom step leading to the Captain’s quarters. Arms resting on his knees, the boy felt relieved the immediate danger was over. The Evermores gathered with […]

21 The Miller’s Wheel

Draft 2019.11.08.01 — Leena looked for Theotello during vespers, and then the morning meal. He seemed to have vanished after returning from Bon Abbi three days ago. She even looked at the pier. Not sure where to look next, Leena came back to the Meeda building. Maybe she would see something she missed last night, […]

20 Raiders of Liez

Draft 2019.11.05.01 — Conall held an unusual gadget his father gave him earlier in the day. He gripped a leather strap fastened to a piece of wood. Attached at one end was a round piece of glass, about the width of a hand. At the other end was a short, flat metal piece that slid […]

19 The Casselberry Event

Draft 2019.10.30.01 — The Lady of Bon Abbi sat still as Dali braided her hair. She gathered a section and separated them into three parts. Weaving them together, Dali took another handful of hair and repeated the process. Before long, Eva wore a simple but elegant crown of braids, with her hair cascading down. “There,” […]

18 Taking a Stand

Draft 2019.10.30.01 — Several times on their way to Tuva, the boys had to stop their progress. Something about the swishing of tails and the sound of hoofbeats caused Ena to burst into a full run. She spooked the horses every time she passed them. Josah would stop, jump off his saddle, and call Ena. […]

17 Leaving Bon Abbi

Draft 2019.10.23.01 — “Again,” shouted Graybard. “Remember your stance. Spread your feet shoulder-width, with one foot slightly in front of the other. Always keep your balance!” More recruits joined his training sessions since Eva Marie survived an attack. Most were young, with a handful of older men. It pleased Graybard to see their progress, swinging […]

16 The Fallen of Karune

Draft 2019.10.20.01 — Three days had passed since Brother Sammil first arrived in Weshaven. Oona Sera, ruler and host, ushered him into Domus Caelum, the gathering hall. Sammil recalled how he shaded his eyes when he entered. White walls and ceilings reflected light in every direction. Oona led the way down a corridor, with an […]

15 Making His Move

Draft 2019.10.17.01 — Luka surveyed the Common Court outside the city walls. He took in the sounds, smells, and sights of merchants and commoners selling and buying wares. His decision to expel them from the Inner Courts pleased him. It reserved those spaces for the nobles of Casselberry. Waves of people acknowledged Luka as he […]

14 Confessions

Draft 2019.10.12.01 — Eva gripped the side of the wagon as it approached Saith Saor. The clamor of the wooden wheels rolling over the bridge was enough to alert the guards. She couldn’t tell the time of day. Darkness had overtaken them in their rush to leave from Midland. As Tomas slowed the horses, Eva […]

13 Sola Del Sol

Draft 2019.10.10.01 — The wagon from Bon Abbi passed a smaller road that led south of Lake Marablain. The trail was once used to harvest trees for the Midland walls. Today, it allowed travelers to avoid passing through the city. Eva was sure Luka camped somewhere here. She always marveled at the placement of Midland […]

12 Taking Action

Draft 2019.10.5.01 — Three days had passed since Luka confronted Eva Marie. Having a Chronicler confirm she was the Lady of Bon Abbi threw him off. It would take time for Luka to respond. Graybard yawned as he sat on the horse blanket, looking around the barn. He decided it’s been too long since he […]

11 Journey to Weshaven

Draft 2019.09.28.01 — Brother Sammil was never fond of the sea, especially the waters around Northport. The seawater currents made it difficult to navigate ships around the island. Two days of brisk winds, turbulent waters, and crashing waves were difficult to endure. The Molly Red was in the open sea now, with favorable winds pushing […]

10 Making Choices

Draft 2019.09.17.01 — Traveling from Northport to Bon Abbi was challenging, but the landscape was breathtaking. Theotello, his travel bag slipped onto his right shoulder, gazed at the rolling hills. Wildflowers bloomed everywhere one last time before the harvest season would begin. There were few travelers to Northport. Most came from Bon Abbi who shared […]

09 The Chroniclers of Northport

Draft 2019.08.26.01 — The day before, while Bon Abbi was preparing for Luka’s visit, something else was happening. Theotello, a young apprentice Chronicler, sat on the front steps of the Meeda building in Northport. It was the heart of the city where the occasional visitor came to request an audience with a Chronicler. But the […]

08 Noble Challenge

Draft 08-01 – Josah sat on the flatten hay as the morning sunlight broke through the darkened barn. Ena stretched and walked over to Graybard, who awoke to the large cat staring at him. “Josah,” he whispered. “Do something.” Smiling at the warrior’s dilemma, Josah chuckled. “Well, she hasn’t eaten yet. That’s why she is […]

07 Transformation

Draft 2019.09.08.01 — Caleb lit a candle, cupped his right hand by the flame, and made his way into the room. He handed it to Josah, as the others followed. “We’ll need a few more candles,” Josah whispered as he looked around. The hidden room was about four meters in width and depth. The ceiling […]

06 Preparing for Luka Dey

Draft 2019.08.26.01 — Evelyn twisted until Josah released his hold. “The only way you can rescue me is by becoming Michael John Mayweather again.” She stepped back, mumbling, trying to understand how a noble’s son could take on a new name and reject his own. “What happened to you? How could you have changed so […]

05 A Lady to Lead

Josah took a step away from the wall, still trying to hide his identity. Offering his hand, he felt an electric charge run through him when Evelyn placed her hand in his. The sudden realization that he missed Evelyn over the years was overwhelming. With his hair still obscuring his face, he said almost in […]

04 The Miller’s Daughter

Graybard led the Evermore brothers from behind a large red barn near the Village of Tuva. Home fires and torches outside dwellings pierced the darkness, making Tuva feel welcoming. Wooden fences on either side of the road appeared to divide fields as pastures. The moon shared enough light to reveal a stone wall connected to […]

03 Surviving Filgore Valley

Draft 2019.04.10.01 — Graybard! Graybard!” shouted Josah as he watched the seasoned soldier run through the thicket. Graybard ignored the call to stop. He kept running forward, swinging his sword to clear his way through the underbrush. Josah could hear many Dragoons running through the woods. “Conall, Caleb squat down, now!. Keep your hands in […]

02 Gray the Bard

Draft 2019.04.09.03 — The walk to Cornor didn’t take Josah long, as the village was within the Southport borders. Barkeeps built the pubs there to avoid the Casselberry tariffs and scrutiny. As Josah reached Cornor Square, he paused. Not much had changed over the years, except for the cobblestone road. Merchants often left their wagons […]

01 Going Home

Draft 2019.04.08.03 – The winds were light as a small crew prepared to hoist down a longboat from the side of the Molly Red. A tall, massive cog ship made of oak, the Molly Red had several masts, with the mainsail at the center. It had fore and stern castles for crew and guest quarters. […]